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A TALK BY RON CARLSON
I just want to talk about a few things maybe slightly
differently than we're used to speaking. So many times when a writer
travels . . . I've been a teacher for thirty years, and what you do is
you get kind of the same information but in different language, and I
think that's what I am going to be bringing you, is some of the same
information you've been in hearing maybe in different language.
I've written and published dozens and dozens of stories
in the last years, and I'm primarily a story writer. We can talk about
writing a novel if you want to, I've just finished a draft of a novel.
In fact, one of the emails I just answered was that my editor is now
ready to talk, and we'll start that process in the next week or two.
But primarily, for me, it's been stories, and I've ended up writing them
differently than I thought. When I first started writing, it was very
strange because I waited and waited. I had some good ideas and I wanted
to write, but I wasn't confident, I kept thinking, Well, I'll just wait
until I know the whole story, and then I'll go somewhere and
write it. I had a good idea, Oh, that's a good idea, but what would it
be? Then the rest of it wouldn't appear to me. I'd see one colorful or
arresting edge, and I was nervous about that. I wasn't used to going
in or heading off somewhere without knowing where I was going. And what
I've learned to do is exactly that. So I began writing when I was your
age, writing stories that were very strange to me, and very unmanageable,
almost, I mean I can't exactly recount how I wrote them. There are stories
that I know exactly how I wrote, and I'll talk about a few of those.
I think if you write a hundred stories, there are going to be moments
that seem like, some stories that seem like gifts. I mean karmic, magical
gifts, but not very many of them.
And so of the hundred stories I've published, I would
say that how many of those stories did I know the ending of when I started?
And the answer is four. Okay, three. Two. So that's very strange to me.
That's kind of a confession, and so I've learned that the one thing I
know that's different for me now than when I was first starting is that
when I start a story I know I'll get it. But I don't know what it is.
I don't know what it's going to be. Sometimes I don't know if they're
going to be serious or comic. I wrote a story called "Zanduce at
Second" about the baseball player who killed the people. "Zanduce
at Second" is a concept story. What if there's a baseball player
who killed people with foul balls? A great athlete who could just hit
a screaming foul ball into the stands in such a way that people were
harmed, killed. What would that be? I'm an old baseball player, so I
was thinking about that. I like when the proscenium is broken, you know,
whenever the play comes into the audience or vice versa. And so that
had my attention.
I see that the regions from which I've taken my story
ideas are my own experiences, things that have happened to me. Such as
the boiling oil story we were talking about earlier, what we wanted to
do came from a notion one night when I saw something on television. Actually,
I saw the old Hunchback of Notre Dame with Charles Laughton,
which is a great version. Actually I'd seen both. Anthony Quinn was in
that in 1957, and Esmerelda and the whole ticket. But the oil, I thought,
wow, they were lucky that was warm. What if it was, oh, what if? So you
have What if a baseball player, so What if boiling oil wasn't boiling?
And those are concept stories. I'll talk about those in a minute.
Most of my stories are drawn from my own experience,
literally things I've confronted, so that I did drop a mattress off a
truck in Salt Lake City. One time in February I was headed for the landfill
and I had a bunch of junk on there, and topped by a mattress. This was
an old Ford—it didn't have these hooks—I put this wire in
the hole and what happened was the little wire, which were these old
rusty coat hangers, one broke, the rope went, the air caught the mattress,
it went off the truck, but it went off the freeway. And I was five stories
from the ground. I mean this mattress, there's a chance I killed people.
It's the largest thing I've dropped the furthest. In a way, that's the
way I think of what a story idea is. What's the longest thing you've
dropped the furthest? Or what's the most sick you were, or the furthest
from home, or each of those things? And our inventories on those things
as human beings is huge and kind of arresting. A writer is a person who
pays attention to her life and wants to know about it. And that doesn't
mean exactly what happened, but maybe what the truth is underneath what
happened.
So yeah, I draw things from my own experiences, and
that's not teachable is what you decide to write about. I think the mandate
is that you have to write about something that matters to you. And that's
all. I don't look to movies of the week or mainstream culture for any
ideas. I wouldn't know what they would be. You know diseases were popular
for a while, and I wouldn't want to write about a disease unless it mattered
to me. And it's legitimate to write about a disease, loss, death, all
these things that happen, but it has to matter to you. I mean, if it
matters to you it's legitimate. There's a chance that if it doesn't matter
to you, someone else is writing it. And if they are, let them. It's too
much work for me to go through it.
So things from my own experience that leap out. I
mean sometimes it isn't all these, you know, I've never witnessed a bank
robbery, although I've read about thousands and thousands. And when you
send me your manuscript, don't put the bank robbery in there. And I don't
know exactly why certain things cling to us, why they jump out. It's
a little bit like the way we misremember. I think memory is just as challenging,
as interesting and as prismatic as imagination. Imagination's championed
over memory, and memory is such a reliable thing, but not really. And
so when we're both at the same event, we both remember it slightly differently
depending on who we are. Sometimes a flurry of leaves ticketing across
the street in the fall can put someone in tears and everybody else is
annoyed because they're going to have to rake in the morning. So it's
that kind of thing, the sensibility.
I told you about the story last night that was based
on that speech class incident, but I wrote a story, the story I wrote
before that was a story called "Rocket Day" where, here's what
happened: my son was making a rocket for his senior physics class in
high school. And they make them out of these two-liter pop bottles, and
they turn them upside down, and then you're judged on design and you
make a parachute system. It's really quite a good assignment, and I really
wanted to help him make that rocket, but every time I came in the garage,
he'd turn and point: "Get out! Get out! Not your rocket." And
I was trying to see, he went with three fins instead of four, and a tear-drop
shaped fin, and it was really a piece of work, and he painted it orange.
So I knew the day was Friday at nine he would be launching his rockets,
and I had forgotten about it. I was at home, and when I work at home,
I don't really get properly dressed. I have an old pair of Levi's and
an old L. L. Bean shirt with the collar frayed out and a pair of slippers
which is not a pair. I mean they're a pair now, but they're two different
slippers, they're working for me. I've done a lot of writing in these
clothes, and Fridays are a day when I try to stay home and work. So I
had forgotten that it was rocket day, and at nine o'clock I remembered,
slapped my forehead, and ran over and got in my car, my old beat-up Explorer,
and drove to the high school. And went in the wrong way, parked crossways
in all these beautiful cars the high school kids have. The physics class
was on the football field, and I could see them. It was a beautiful day,
and the children were there, these kids. The physics teacher was there,
a woman. So I had my glasses, I got my binoculars out, I had brought
them, and leaned on the hood of my car and was looking at the rockets,
and one went up, "Sssssss!" just like that, and I was so far
that it went, and then I heard it, and I thought, Oh, Colin's will be
better than that. I noticed that one wasn't orange, and then I saw him
with his rocket, I was in time, I was going to make it.
But then I had this story idea. And you've had this
feeling, and I'm just saying this so that we're all on the same page.
And what it was was, I heard gravel popping in the wheels of a golf cart.
And someone was approaching, and I knew without lifting my binoculars
that it was the security guard. This guy in a black t-shirt, and the
t-shirt reads in big letters, SECURITY. And I knew the guy because my
other son had had a run-in with him earlier in the week, and he came
up and said something like, "Can I help you?" Which means, "You're
under arrest" or "Get out of here." And so, then I had
that feeling—don't you have that feeling?—where all of a
sudden I felt literally beside myself. As if I had moved over here, and
I was watching Ron Carlson, and I thought, in my heart, really what I
was doing was I thought, I am going to win this with him. I was going
to pull rank in some way, I was just going to . . . But that was the
moment then. Me in my stupid little middle-class life confronted by the
security guard. He didn't want me glassing the co-eds on the football
field. Some geezer is over here. What's he doing with the children. So
there are lots of ways to think of how that became the colonel of "Rocket
Day."
I could give you lots of other examples. I won't.
Is that a story? No. How would it be a story? I've learned that there
is something there for me, something warm, an ember that I want and the
only way I can find out is by going in. Starting writing. I have to write
my way to find the story. So I am always writing to find. When I was
at Beloit for a term, I wrote an essay for Tom McBride on why we write,
and I wrote about rocket day for him. And I said I am writing to find
out, that's why I am, in a sense, all these things . . . I know I was
there when it happened, but I wonder what it is. So my own experiences,
then the experiences of others which I steal, you know, someone will
say something, and I'll hear ten things and none of them, and then the
eleventh one will stick to me, and I'll think, Oh, I want that. Someone
will say something very curious about a summer job they had or someplace
they lived or just the oddest thing, and that's another thing that's
not teachable, why what sticks to us sticks to us. I've heard some arresting
things. Stories, true stories, I am sure you have too, that have no valence
for me. I don't want them. But other things, just the very shadow I think,
Oh, I am going to take that.
And I've done that a lot. I did it with a story called "Phenomena" about
the sheriff who doesn't want to see a UFO, but one of my friends who
is now a headmaster of a school in Massachusetts had as his summer job
taking boats underground in underground caverns one summer at a kind
of a natural amusement park. And he'd get them in these boats and they'd
pull them through the caverns then he'd tell the legend of the caverns.
It's just good stuff. I thought, I am taking that. And I gave it to my
guy as a summer job. And then the third area is these concepts. What
if there's a baseball player who killed people? What if the boiling oil
did not boil? Those are trickier. This is a different thing. These other
two require empathy. I mean that's the thing that people don't talk about
very much in craft classes. And it's a requirement for fiction. That
is to say, you have to occupy the person. There is no such thing as other
people. Everybody has a motive, and it's not necessarily sympathetic
. . . just that notion, there's no such thing as other people. So radical
empathy, which comes from kind of what I said last night about radical
attention, that I am looking for fiction in the stories I read, and I
judge contests like everybody else, I read way too much, like everybody
else, that I'm looking for a book, I'm looking for a story or a fiction
or a prose that has every sentence has had attention. Every sentence
has been worked and thought about and considered. That I am not the first
guy here. And I read a lot of sentences sometimes where it feels like
I'm the first guy. That the writer missed it, and I should put it straight.
I mean that simply as a teacher.
So the empathy, being in with the character, and
one of the things then, since I don't know where I'm going when I start
a story, why would I hurry? I see a lot of stories that are determined
to get to their last line, and they hurry toward it, and they ignore
and abuse and miss a couple of opportunities. It's as if the point of
the story is the point of the story, which it is not. The point of the
story is page two, something sweet on page two. I love that Guterson's
book Snow Falling on Cedars, but what I loved about that book
was in the first page where the courtroom is like this room, and it's
all one wall is windows, and the snow is falling against the windows.
With no windows in the courtroom I wouldn't have read another page. And
then, somewhere about page a hundred and fifty there's a great moment
when the guy's come back from the internment camp, the Japanese-American,
to see the woman who has betrayed him because the man who promised him
the land has died, and his widow is not going to keep the promise. And
the man stands there on the porch, on this wooden porch, and as she's
saying, you know, no way, absolutely not, the orchard is not going to
be yours, it's mine. My husband may have said that, but nobody knows
and I'm not going to keep a promise. But what happens is the wind comes
in, fills his shirt, it goes in the sleeve of his short-sleeve shirt,
and it builds up his shirt for a minute, it goes on. That's the truth
in the moment. That's the truth in the book.
I am talking about embodying. In fact I am talking
about embodying a moment, putting it in the bodies more than I am moving
toward the point. And one of the words I say least of all in my teachings
at ASU or anywhere is the word "theme." The theme is going
to be there no matter what you do. You don't need to schedule your theme.
You write a good story, the theme will pop out. Annie Dillard said it,
she said you scratch an event, and theme comes out of it. And I am an
event guy. I keep my nose down. I wouldn't know an idea if it was . .
. . I am sure there is something in here that I am missing. I got a bunch
of emails after my story appeared in Best American Short Stories last
time, "The Ordinary Son." I got a bunch of emails. This first
one said, Hey Mr. Carlson you're such a good writer. We like your work
so much. Hey listen, on that story "The Ordinary Son," what
theme were you writing toward? You know if you could just tell me, that
would be a great help. Thanks. Love your writing. And so I got about
eight of these, so I wrote back to the first girl and said, I don't write
for theme. I was seventeen and had a job at motel, maintaining a motel
in Houston, Texas, and I realized I was developing a private life. It
was a heavy time for me, and I wrote a story based on sweeping the driveway
and the other things I did, the girl I met. And so she wrote back to
me and said, That's the wrong answer. Okay, what's the theme, cough it
up, my teacher won't accept that, come on, what is that? So I looked
at the story again, and there were some themes in there. Being smart
doesn't guarantee you'll be happy, I sent that one back. I had about
eight of these emails, and I gave them all a different theme. I wrote
them all back. I never saw so many themes in my work.
But I don't work toward theme like that at all.
The last kid wrote to me and said, I said, Tell your teacher she owes
me a milkshake because I've done all of this work for her, and he said,
No, it's not, you don't understand. Part of the story had appeared on
the Quebec exit exam for high school. I don't know how they did that
because it has some risky stuff in it. So he said, But I'll get you the
test booklet, I'll put it in my jacket and ask to go to the restroom.
And I said, No, no, Louis. Don't do that.
So I don't think about theme, and you know that,
probably. But I just work from event, and I've learned that by trusting
the event and paying attention to the event and by evolving the event
and letting it migrate, I start with what I know and then write toward
what I don't. As soon as I can't touch bottom anymore, as soon as I'm
off the foundations of what I was thinking, that's when the story, that's
when that moment happens, and that's when most writers would leave the
room. I've left the room. The most important thing I'll say to you now
is that I write every day, that's pretty true. And every day I work,
I want to leave the room. I don't mean some of the time or about half
the time I want, I mean every day. I think, I've had this thought, I
don't know if you've ever had it, but I have it all the time, that maybe
I'll be smarter in the other room. I go in the other room, I'm just not
feeling very smart right now, I've come to a point and it's a little
blip, it's a very small problem, not a big problem. Not a decision about
whether, which war to invoke, or where it should be set. But some small
thing about somebody's name, or they'll be drinking coffee and I don't
believe in the coffee. Something about it feels a little thin, a little
anemic. You know, if you said, I have a cabin in the woods in Utah, everybody
says, Oh, I want a cabin in a woods and I'll write all day. I'll write
till my family worries about my health. Oh, Ron, come, take some nourishment.
Have some crackers and soup. Stop that! Come away from that typewriter.
And your eyes would be cross-eyed, and you would be weary, and bleary,
and pale.
I don't want that. I don't want the whole day. I've
been in the cabin in a woods. And if you get a cabin in the woods, I'll
tell you what you'll have. There's firewood, there's a screen door to
fix, the fridge is always going out. What I want is about an hour and
a half a day. In an hour and a half you can write seven hundred words
if you take a deep breath, and if you're not too hard on yourself and
you keep the editor out of the room. And so what I do is every time I
want to leave the room, I . . . you don't have to stay here all day.
Don't have to solve every problem. Just have to write through this thin
part. This feels a little bloodless, it's stupid, it's substandard, to
use a polite term. Just write through that. Just work. Just type. It's
just that stupid. And it is. It's just like hitting a rock with a hammer.
And I do that for twenty minutes. And that is so interesting, there comes
a moment, you've had this too, I love this moment because its almost
an invisible moment. I don't even want any coffee now. I don't need to
get up and get coffee. I've crossed to the other side, and I own my house
again. And it's so interesting. And I will have written just five wooden
sentences, or six. And I'm made.
There are days when I leave the room, I'd get up
and go down to the kitchen and get some Mr. Coffee and Mr. Refrigerator
and Mr. Newspaper. I've got three cats, so the day, you know, the world
wants us, and the world gets everybody. It's hard to write. It gets most
of my students. I'd say it gets seventy-five percent of them eventually,
and it should. I mean, it kind of should. I don't know that writing is
any better that being good at certain other things.
So I stay in the room. The other thing I do, the
only other thing I am interested in, is surviving the draft. People say,
Oh that story of yours, it's lined up, it looks like you did the backstroke
all the way across, it's so beautiful the way you did the backstroke
all the way through that story. How did you do that? And I talk, I talk
frankly about my stories, but what I did is not drown. I would just not
drown. I just want to keep my head above the surface in the draft, until
I cross to the other side. I never ever come out where I thought I would.
I strike the far shore, some way, I can't even recognize where I started.
Then there's a time to fix it. A lot of writing is of course work and
rewriting. And so one of the ways I don't drown is I include. And what
I include is as much inventory as possible, especially in a concept story
like "Zanduce at Second." When I started that story I was really
nervous. I don't want to stop writing. I don't want to have to get up.
The end. Page four. I have all these four-page starts, go down to the
kitchen and that's the world I can't write. I know for a fact that the
reason there is a Starbucks on every corner in America is that these
people couldn't stay in the room. They had to go get their coffee and
they sit in public and announce, say, I quit. I couldn't do it.
And so the way I do that is by being all that stuff
we talked about. By being specific, by including things, I take the long
way around. I am used to writing thirty-two pages to get eighteen all
the time. The story I read last night, it comes in at about four thousand
words. The first draft of the story was nine thousand words, and I wasn't
even halfway done with that first draft. And when I was your age, I wasn't
going to do that. Write nine thousand words to get four thousand? Where's
the door? I want to coach volleyball. It would be easier. No, it's not
easier, coaching volleyball is very difficult. I don't want to do that.
I wanted to write one silver story perfectly, and have very word contoured,
Oh, Ron, you're so good, that's just golden. But it's work, I mean it's
bloody work, and my folders reflect that, and I am sure yours do, too,
and you know that.
And so in "Zanduce at Second," when I wrote
the first sentence, the first sentence of that story is, I just took
a deep breath and I give everybody a name, and sometimes when I don't
believe in the character I give them three names, And it is that, "By
his thirty-third birthday, a gray May day," so you can hear me trying
not to finish the sentence. It's like when I had the mattress in that
story that fell off the truck, I am trying to go as long as long as I
can, the mattress is my motor, you see. I've got it. I've got the money,
I've got a dollar in my pocket, the mattress gets to go off the truck.
I'm rich, so I can write all day, but as soon as drop the mattress, I'm
done. Leave the room. Go to Starbucks. I tried to get one or two or three
thousand words before the mattress would fly off the truck, and it's
really nervous-making because by the time that happens then there has
to be an inventory, a trajectory, and a constellation of events in place
that might help me further. The material is going to help me find my
way. I am not some pioneer who is going to make his way to the end of
the story with a machete on ground that nobody's ever trod before. I'm
going to lean heavily on the inventory that I've created, and so by the
end of this sentence there's a woman who didn't exist when I started
the sentence, not even in my head. And of course when you introduce a
character, that's a huge responsibility in terms of how it's going to
come back for you. But that's the same as if a person goes into the room
and the room's too . . .
Clint [McCown] had an office in Beloit, I was thinking
about it today, it was in an old Carnegie library, but to go into his
office he had a hallway about as long as this room, and then he had his
bookcases there, so you kind of had to move aside, it was the dumbest
thing I've ever seen, the way he had arranged it. So if you used that
hallway in the way they put the bookcases, or if you put a piano in the
entry then that's going to come back for you and help you. Something
on the floor, I had a house once where the kitchen was carpeted, it's
not a good idea. So the sentence is this, "By his thirty-third birthday," see
I don't even know why I gave him the birthday, "a gray, May day,
which found him having a warm cup of spice tea"—this tea comes
back for me about five times—"on the terrace of the Bayside
Inn in Annapolis, Maryland," the hotel I just invented, "with
Carol Ann Menager," oh let me just read the sentence. "By his
thirty-third birthday, a gray May day that found him having a warm cup
of spice tea on the terrace of the Bayside Inn in Annapolis, Maryland,
with Carol Ann Menager, a nineteen-year-old woman he had hired out of
the Bethesda Hilton Turntable Lounge at eleven o'clock that morning,
Eddie Zanduce had killed eleven people and had a reputation for it, was
famous, actually, for killing people, was, really, the most famous killer
of the day, his photograph in the sports section of the paper every week
or so, and somewhere in the article appeared the phrase 'eleven people,'
or 'eleven fatalities'—in fact, the word 'eleven' now had that
association first, the number of the dead. In all the major-league baseball
parks his full name could be heard every game day in some comment, the
gist of which would be, 'Popcom and beer for $10.50, that's bad, but
just be glad Eddie Zanduce isn't here 'cause he'd kill you for sure,'
and the vendors would slide the beer across the counter and say, 'Watch
out for Eddie!' which had come to supplant 'Here ya go!' or 'Have a nice
day!' in conversations even away from the parks."
So that's one of the longest sentences, probably
the longest sentence I had ever written to that point, although there's
two other longer sentences in here. And so he's having a warm cup of
spice tea on a gray, May day in Annapolis, Maryland with a young hooker,
so now I've got all this responsibility to them. I did a story once,
I write some nonfiction, I did a story on mountain-climbing where there's
a young guy named Jim Woodmansey in Jackson Hole who had saved three
people's lives in climbing accident, and I'd been snowed in the mountains
the year before, so I went up, I called him, I went up and I met these
people. I met one of the survivors whose toes, his whole feet were black.
He had just gotten out of the hospital, it's an interview where he was
lying on the couch with his blackened, frost-bitten feet, he later lost
all of his toes, and then I met with Woodmansey, and Woodmansey told
me the whole story in about three hours in his place as the light failed
one afternoon in Jackson Hole. And when I drove away from him I had a
feeling that I didn't connect with fiction writing for about a year,
but I was really sad. I mean, this very healthy, brilliant young guy
had saved two lives, and he had told me his story and now I had it. It
was like this huge weight, I thought, I'm responsible for this now.
And when you create a character in a story you are
responsible in the same way. Sometime they are going to be slight, sometime
they're going to be comic, but you're responsible, and that responsibility
means that kind of empathy and occupying the character in such a way
that the waitress or the piano teacher or whoever it is gets a new day.
You're inventing it. I think that's one of our responsibilities as writers
is not make the highway patrolman or anybody in a uniform, sometimes
that's hard because uniforms want to make people generic, unique and
your person.
There's one other thing I want to tell you about
the story "Zanduce at Second." So he spends the afternoon,
he's lying there on the bed with his ankles crossed and his hands behind
his head, they'd been shopping together, and they haven't had sex. He
didn't hire her for that. He hired her for company so he could survive
the afternoon with the burden of all this harm that he has created. And
she's getting dressed there and says "Who are you? I've seen your
name and picture. Are you an actor?" And he says no. And he tells
her that he's . . . "Oh, you killed those people. You're that baseball
player. What does it feel like to kill people. Is it bad to kill eleven?" And
he says, "It was as bad as it got after one." And so then I
knew my story had a certain timbre. It was going to be sober, it was
going to be serious. And she interviews him and she's hoping that he'll
see her. And she gets kind of pissed off that he doesn't. He's just there
and they're talking, and they went shopping and he bought her a tortoise-shell
beret for her hair and a red sweater. And on page four when they buy
the red sweater, I didn't know that she could come back in the story.
I was just trying to get there, I didn't know where the story was going.
This is one of the stories I was blindest in.
On page seven of my draft, the day or two days that
I wrote "Zanduce at Second," I came to a point which was this:
they're going up to Baltimore because he plays for the Orioles. He's
the third baseman, Eddie Zanduce. "On the drive North, Carol Ann
Menager says one thing that stays with Eddie Zanduce after he drops her
at the little blue Geo in the Hilton parking lot and after he has dressed
and played three innings of baseball before a crowd of twenty-four thousand.
A stadium a third full under low clouds this early in the season with
the Orioles going ho-hum and school not out yet. And she says it like
so much she has said in the six hours he has known her right out of the
blue as they cruise north from Annapolis." Now listen to this, the
reason the sentence is designed this way—"And she says it
like so much she has said in the six hours he has known her," then
there is a hyphen. And the reason there is a hyphen in this whole other
discursion is I don't know what she said. And then it says, "Right
out of the blue as they cruise north from Annapolis on Route 2 in his
thick silver Mercedes, a car he thinks nothing of and can afford not
to think of, under the low sullen skies that bless and begrudge the very
springtime hedgerows that the car speeds past." So she says something,
that he remembers in the batter's box three hours later, and I don't
know what it is. Again and again when I'm writing stories and people
. . . I love dialogue, I love writing dialogue. And dialogue is very
involved in occupying the moment. So that someday says something, and
then what do they do.
I use the bodies and the room to find out what might
be possible for the person to say. People say dialogue should advance
the story. Well it might advance the story, but in my stories, how can
it advance . . . my characters don't know the story. I mean, we're working
along together here, bumbling towards something. So I have to listen,
and that's the other thing that I want to say that I think is sort of
important in terms of . . . I try to be humble before my material. Once
it gets up and going and there's a heartbeat, then I try to listen as
loudly as I can.
So that was on page seven. I had to stay in the room
till page eleven of my draft to find out what she said. And those four
pages—I am probably saying this because I am really proud of those
four pages because that's when I was a writer—I did not leave the
room, I stayed there and pushed it. She said something he remembers in
the batter's box. So here it is, a page later, it says, "She's been
treated one hundred ways, but not this way. Not with a delicate diffidence,
and she's surprised that it stings. She's been hurt and neglected, and
ignored and made to feel invisible, but this is different somehow. This
is personal. She says, 'The day was fine. I just wish you'd seen me.'
For some reason Eddie Zanduce responds to this, 'I don't see people.
It's not what I do. I can't afford it.' Having said it, he immediately
regrets how true it sounds to him. Why is he talking to her? 'I'm tired,'
he adds." So I'm just out in the scene, I'm doing that thing where,
what are you writing about? This is good stuff. This is to the center
of it. But I'm still waiting for the other shoe to fall. What did she
say? "He regrets his decision to have company purchase it, because
it has turned out to be what he wanted so long, and something about this
girl has crossed into his vision. She is smart and pretty and he hates
this. He does feel bad she's a hooker. And then she says the haunting
thing, the advice that he will carry into the game later that night.
'Why don't you try to do it?' He looks at her as she finishes. 'You killed
those people on accident, what if you had tried? Could you kill somebody
on purpose?'" Then the whole story took off because he's in the
batter's box and he says, "Eddie Zanduce remembered Carol Ann Menager
in the car, and he hoists his bat"—he's in the batter's box—"and
he says, 'I am going to kill one of you now.' 'What's that, Eddie?' Caulkins,
the Minnesota catcher, has heard his threat, but it means nothing to
Eddie. And he says,. 'Nothing. Just something I am going to do.'
And then the ending turned out to be, I'm a nice
person. I think of myself as nice person. And I would bring you a glass
of water if you asked, but the hatred he feels at the end of story was
just thrilling for me to write. I got a little chill when I wrote it.
So that's an example of me being surprised by my material and listening
to my material as I go along. But it's also, I could list dozens and
dozens examples of you have to tolerate the ambiguity of not knowing
where you're going and then you have to tolerate the fact that these
things begin to evolve. When I wrote the title story in The Hotel
Eden, it was written about this love letter this guy Elaine and
I, my wife and I knew in London, and we met him and we both had a crush
on him he was just so charismatic and this striking, handsome guy on
a bicycle and just dashed everywhere on his bicycle. Knew all the barmen
in London and every place we went. Had credit, lines of credit places,
such a worldly person and we were kids. And when I wrote "The Hotel
Eden," he started to migrate on me, because you know, he's the kind
of guy always taking us down to places that were in Conrad, along the
Thames, and one day he came back and he had found a body that day, and
his life was big. Our life was little, we were school kids. And I realized
he was going to be this kind of snake. This seductive, charismatic snake
in the story, and I had to tolerate letting him migrate that way. So
where I wanted to go wasn't as valuable as where I learned to
go from the story. I am sure you know what I am talking about.
So those are the things that, I try to empathize
with my characters. I really take my time. I don't hurry. I try to get
so many words a day, depending. I push myself for that. I mean I measure
my talent, and I am spending and using, I'm trying to get something out
of my talent. I am not being lazy. It's important to be prolific. We're
not going to live and die by a single story, by our instrument, by the
fact that we're writers and thinkers and making these observations. When
I work, I am an evolved teacher like all of you are, and I am married
to a woman who is a scrupulous editor, but I don't let the editor in
the room, myself or her. I'm absolutely aboriginal when I am writing
and I can really tell when its going well because my spelling goes away.
I don't know how to spell the word hide, h-i-d-e. h-y-d-e, I don't know.
So as soon as I start that misspelling, then I am in the zone it's really
good, and I go like crazy. I've always been a spelling champion, but
I don't edit, I don't judge, I include. I don't evaluate: Should it be
Doris or Darlene? I always use, I have a few default formats. I always
use Buick for car, Doris for a woman, Mickey for a man, and that's it.
In my whole lifetime I've only met one Doris, and that was at a wedding.
And she said "Hi. I'm Doris," and I said "Oh!" Isn't
that odd. Isn't that weird. So I don't judge and I do not reach for any
of my reference texts. I do not look, if I do not know where a city is
I just say it. I just make it up. I keep all my books, I have a dictionary
stand someone gave me, a beautiful, antique dictionary stand, so I know
when, the cat sleeps on the dictionary, when I get up, then I quit, and
that's evaluation time. And you don't want your editor in there saying,
Oh no, not that, oh no, not that. And about the fifth time he says not
that, you're out drinking coffee, and then you're at Starbucks.
And so, my books, my thesaurus, my dictionary, the
Yellow Pages, which I use a lot, the atlas which I use the most, The
Joy of Cooking— I am done when I open that—and I have
a couple other little books. That's for later. I try, I am jealous of
my time, sometimes I only get forty minutes or thirty-five minutes, and
I am not afraid of thirty-five minutes, if I have to be somewhere at
eleven and it's nine-thirty, I am going to move the boat, today. I am
not going to wait for eight months' free time to write a great big book.
That would be like a snake eating a pig. I can't believe that a snake
enjoys eating a pig. I don't know. Who am I to say. It kind of looks
like it would feel good, but I want to nibble. I want to eat every day.
I want to take little bites ever yday. And then, at the end you have
the story.
I was talking to Clint this morning about these three
drafts of stories I've that are done, and now I'll go back and do the
work and rewrite. So that's my note on the process. I will say this,
that I've looked at how I work and I've come to trust it, but it's kind
of dangerous, the idea of using your intuition or talent or whatever
it is, the unknown, and your knowledge of what the event was, the hunting
accident or the family reunion, and then just hoping that the two of
them can take you somewhere else. It's not going to be, I mean it isn't
going to be a hundred percent. There's a line from Richard Wilbur's poem,
where he says, "Every time the queens sits down, she knows there
is going to be chair." I am not sure, and that's the way I feel about
some of these stories that I get out, I know, that if she sits over there,
someone moves the chair, good, got you. But I've sat down and there's
been no chair before. And then you just put the story away, or many times
I've saved sections of stories.
I've got this terrible story right here that I am
traveling with, and the second page is the most beautiful page I've ever
written, and the story's not going to work, so I know what I have to
do, but it's taken me now about seven months to admit it. And the rewriting
there, I'll use what I call big tools, I'm not going to try to go in
and try to feather it out, like the way you'd fix a piece of furniture
by, marring it out, by making the grain. My father restored cars, and
he could make wood grain for a dashboard. It's not like that. You don't
use a little, two types of ink and a little brush one with a saw, cut
off page one, take off what I've got. It feels so terrible but it's wait,
wait, wait find it.
So what I've been really talking about is process.
Craft, elements of the craft, even elements of style are totally obtainable.
You all know about reading, and reading widely. You all know about emulating,
and emulating freely. Find a writer I like, you can hear Cormack McCarthy
in "Zanduce on Second." The "springtime hedgerows" the
weather "blesses and begrudges," and so I don't shy away, if
I find somebody I like then I imitate them like crazy. I take the whole
pattern of the sentences. I remember reading a Ring Lardner sentence
when I was first writing twenty-five or thirty years ago and it said, "The
place they would go on Saturday nights was," and there is something
about that sentence, so I wrote a story that said, "The place sat
on Saturday." It was just so fixed, I can't even tell you why it
stuck to me, but I used it to find my own next sentence. You put everybody
in your head and you'll come out eventually.
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